Oh, this is amazing. I approached tears as I read it.
I had some thoughts, mostly about scansion, but the one big thing that stands out to be fixed is that in the last verse, lines two and four do not rhyme, as they do in all the other verses, and for that matter in all the other quatrains.
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Date: 2018-05-10 04:10 pm (UTC)I had some thoughts, mostly about scansion, but the one big thing that stands out to be fixed is that in the last verse, lines two and four do not rhyme, as they do in all the other verses, and for that matter in all the other quatrains.